Lesson 6: Optional. Write a scene in which you show something you were afraid of in your childhood (Comments welcomed)

Something woke me. At first I didn’t know what it was and I kept perfectly still, listening. The room was very dark but the light from the moon shining though the window brightened it slightly. My sister slept in her bed pushed against the other wall, forming a right angle to mine. Suddenly, I froze in fear. I saw the black outline of a man sitting on the edge of the dresser, not two feet from me. I was petrified but did not move or even barely breathe, for fear that he would notice me and kill me. He never moved nor made a sound, but, by his menacing presence, I knew that he would kill me if he became aware of me, so I stayed frozen, not moving, barely breathing. I don’t know how long I laid there looking at him, hoping that he wouldn’t see me and I would survive. When I awoke the next morning, he was gone. Over the next couple of weeks I had two or three more terrifying visits from the man, always at night, always after I awoke from sleeping. One morning when I awoke after an encounter, I lay in bed, looking toward my dresser where he always sat. I started in surprise! The man was there! But he wasn’t a man at all. He was the North and South American continents on my world map!

About anniem

I am a wife and mother of 5 grown children. I also taught high school mathematics for ten years. Now I have cancer and am planning on writing a memoir of my cancer journey.
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6 Responses to Lesson 6: Optional. Write a scene in which you show something you were afraid of in your childhood (Comments welcomed)

  1. GMoniz says:

    I think in your second sentence you mean to say “I KEPT perfectly still..”

    Your piece hooked me in with the first sentence, and I anxiously read about the man you saw. Was there some reason you thought he would kill you? Then when you wrote that you saw him two or three more times, I was afraid that there really was someone there. You finally reveal that what you thought was a man was the North and South American continents on your world map! I heaved a sigh of relief.

    I’m sorry to hear that you have a fight with cancer on your hands, and I hope your memoir will help you to deal with it. I myself find that writing is very therapeutic.

  2. anniem says:

    Thank you very much! I hope to beat this with natural treatments, but they are expensive and very time consuming. I don’t know why I thought the man would kill me, other than that he was an intruder and I was about 8 or 9. I really enjoyed your piece on Lurch. I loved your use of humor to lighten a highly suspenseful and upsetting scene.

  3. Jaya says:

    Very captivating, I instantly put myself in your position and felt hooked by the fear. I found the ending humorous and interesting. I thought of when you wrote of “his menacing presence” and right away I wondered what your thoughts and feelings about America are. great work, thankyou.

    • anniem says:

      Thank you, Jaya! I appreciate that you took the time to read and comment on my writing. I was born and raised in the US, and think it’s a wonderful country, even though the politicians are trying their best to wreck it! I think the reason I saw “the man” was because I have very bad eyesight. Thank you again.

  4. Judith says:

    How terrifying !
    Reminds me of a monster I found sleeping next to me once.
    It was the frayed edge of the blanket straggling across the face of my doll.

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